رفع اشکال و تقویت Writing زبان انگلیسی

[ice]

ممنون بابت توجه شما.
به نظرتون این پیام رو با چه عنوانی ارسال کنیم؟

 

بستگی به عنوان ایمیل قبلی داره (اگر فرض کنیم بهش رسیده، دیده و باز نکرده). باید چیزی باشه که توجه رو جلب کنه. به عنوان مثال:
Graduate student interested in mutual collaberation in bone tissue engineering
عنوانی رو انتخاب کنید که در نگاه اول بفهمه برای چی فرستادید و بازش کنه. اسم فرستنده هم اسم مشخصی باشه، این رو به این دلیل می گم که دوستانی داشتم که این اشتباه رو کردن. کسی ایمیل ناشناس از goldstar/rose... باز نمی کنه.

 

[wood]

درود بر دوستان
من تصمیم دارم رایتینگو از صفر شروع کنم
از همه ی دوستانی که در این زمینه تجربه دارن میخوام راهنماییم کنن

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[Simon2007]

درود بر دوستان
من تصمیم دارم رایتینگو از صفر شروع کنم
از همه ی دوستانی که در این زمینه تجربه دارن میخوام راهنماییم کنن
تشکر[img]images/smilies/smile.gif[/img]

 

من كتاب Paragraphe Development ‌رو پيشنهاد ميدم بهتون. شادزي[img]images/smilies/smile.gif[/img]

[toki]

سلام دوستان عزيز
ميخواستم بدونم ميشه نمونه رايتينگهامونو اينجا بزاريم و يكي از دوستان با تجربه وفهيم زحمت اشكالاتشو بكشه.از بقيه دوستان هم درخواست كمك دارم.به عنوان نمونه يكيشو اينجا ميزارم

Subjects such as art, music and drama should be a part of every child s basic education.
   Indeed learning and education feed the brain, our physics need exercise and suitable nutrition. art, music and drama is akind of food for soul. I totally believe children should learn music, art and drama as a basic education
   Psychologically learning variety of arts such as music helps to empower imagination. Besides by learning of those children learn how to express them and how to show their emotions. They have been thought it is possible to demonstrate their emotion by drawing a picture or playing a musical instrument.
   Being familiar with themselves, their culture and their world is another significant benefit of learning art for children. The children can know more about similarities and differences between various cultures. In fact every culture has different music, different art.
   Moreover teaching art helps children to relax their body and their soul. However brilliant relaxation helps them to concentrate more on others to learn.
   In summary learning some arts such as music, art and etc is one of the basic subject needs of our soul. We should have a special mention to this subject for future of our children. While we must not forget; it should be optional for our children till by a correct choose they can find their ability in special kind of art.

[mahnaz103]

درود بر دوستان
من تصمیم دارم رایتینگو از صفر شروع کنم
از همه ی دوستانی که در این زمینه تجربه دارن میخوام راهنماییم کنن
تشکر[img]images/smilies/smile.gif[/img]

 

با سلام
این پست حاوی کتاب paragraph development هست که دوست خوبمون در پست قبلی معرفیش کردند 

 

ویرایش توسط ForeverBlue برای به روز رسانی لینک

[ice]

Subjects such as art, music and drama should be a part of every child s basic education. 
  Although  learning feeds the brain, our physics  body needs exercise and suitable nutrition. Art, music and drama is a kind of food for the soul. I totally believe children should learn music, art and drama as a form of basic education.
   Psychologically learning a variety of arts such as music helps to empower imagination. Besides On the other hand, by learning such subjects of those children learn how to express themselves and how to show their emotions. They have been thought taught it is possible to demonstrate their emotion by drawing a picture or playing a musical instrument.
   Being familiar with themselves, their culture and their world is another significant benefit of learning art for children. The children can know more about similarities and differences between various cultures. In fact every culture has different music, different art.
   Moreover, teaching art helps children to relax their body and their soul. However, brilliant relaxation helps them to concentrate more on others to learn.
   In summary, learning some arts such as music, art (drawing) and etc is one of the basic subject needs of our soul. We should have a special mention to this subject for future of our children. While we must not forget; that it should be optional for our children till by a correct choose they can to find their ability in a special kind of art of their choice.

 

سبز اضافه شده، قرمز حذف، جملات بنفشتون رو هم متوجه نشدم.
درباره نمره دهی خیلی اطلاع کافی ندارم، ولی بسته به آزمون مورد نظر شیوه نمره دهی تفاوت می کنه.

 

 

[salazar716]

سلام.
یه نامه واس یه ژورنالی میخوام بفرستم یه تصحیحی بکنین بد نیست، جریانش اینه یه مقاله ای تو ژانویه ی 2012 قرار بود بفرستیم یه جا بعد یه ژورنالی گفت آقا بیاین اینجا مجانی، ما هم گفتیم چشم حالا بعد 7 ماه میگن پول بدین، میخوام بگم به حالت گریه زاری که آقا چون تحریم و اینا هست پول نمیشه داد درضمن خودتون گفتین که پول ندین.
این خوبه؟

In January 2012 the article with code of felan was sent to the journal that in advance of it I was offered a free of charge publish in the journal which due to the condition of the journal that is a new and developing, I thought and still think this journal is a perfect place for the article to be published. The article was sent due to the offer but after seven months I have been told to pay the cost that is not possible for the author in Iran to pay because of the sanctions against banks of the country.
I wonder if it may be possible for you to publish the article free of charge.

[blur]

من چندان متخصص نیستم ولی پیشنهاداتی دارم.
بجای with the code of توی پرانتز کد رو بنویسید. همین طور پیشنهاد میکنم جمله بعدشو اینطور بنویسید. that I was already offered a free of charge publication. خیلی جمله بلند شده. بعد journal جمله رو ببندین. برا جمله بعدم شاید این بد نباشه.
Being new and developing, this journal is a perfect... place for the article to be published. So the article  was sent....

بخش آخر جمله بعدیش not possible for the author to pay because of the sanctions on Iranin banks.

[ForeverBlue]

سلام.
یه نامه واس یه ژورنالی میخوام بفرستم یه تصحیحی بکنین بد نیست، جریانش اینه یه مقاله ای تو ژانویه ی 2012 قرار بود بفرستیم یه جا بعد یه ژورنالی گفت آقا بیاین اینجا مجانی، ما هم گفتیم چشم حالا بعد 7 ماه میگن پول بدین، میخوام بگم به حالت گریه زاری که آقا چون تحریم و اینا هست پول نمیشه داد درضمن خودتون گفتین که پول ندین.
این خوبه؟

In January 2012 the article with code of felan was sent to the journal that in advance of it I was offered a free of charge publish in the journal which due to the condition of the journal that is a new and developing, I thought and still think this journal is a perfect place for the article to be published. The article was sent due to the offer but after seven months I have been told to pay the cost that is not possible for the author in Iran to pay because of the sanctions against banks of the country.
I wonder if it may be possible for you to publish the article free of charge.

 

دوست گرامی
1- جملاتتان بسیار طولانی و بعضا مبهم است و ممکن است خواننده را کاملا گیج کند. بهتر است منظورتان را دقیق تر و مختصر تر بنویسید.
2- جملاتتات به شیوه ای فارسی گونه بیان شده و بهتر است به معادل های انگلیسی آن رجوع کنید.

پیشنهاد میکنم ابتدا این تاپیک را مطالعه کنید و سپس متن را بازنویسی کنید. 

[rasa]

سلام و درود فراوان به دوستان عزیز
ممنون میشم اگر متنی که نوشتم اشکالی داره بهم بگین
از هر نظری علاوه بر گرامر برام مهمه که یک رایتینگ کاملا استاندارد باشه از نظر شروع خوب و پایان خوب و......

For developing writing skill we should pay attention to three expects
First, one that is so important is how many words u know. It is necessary in developing writing not even you memorize words also, you should know other parts of them. For instance, it is not enough just that you know the word ‘crime’ as a noun; you should know the adjective is criminal and the verb is to commit a crime and adverb is communally.
The second item in developing writing skill is, GRAMMAR. If you know lots words even the other parts of them but you do not know how can you make sentences; you will not be able to write.so grammar is as important as words.
Increasing your words information and grammar are two important and basic types. There are some other short suggestions:
1-Memorizing some basic sentences like as
2-Recognizing sentences. For example ‘’ they did not go out yesterday.’’
3-findingsome memorizing other words that belong to the same family.