من خودم رایتینگم انقدرا قوی نیست اما تا جای که به
نظرم رسید گفتم، کلا بیشتر بخونین، از for example, for instance و
.. سعی کنین تو هر بند استفاده کنین
از clause بیشتر استفاده کنین چون باعث میشه رسمیتر
بشه. مطمئن باشین رایتینگ با خوندن و ایده گرفتن پیشرفتش خیلی سریعه
اونجاهایی که علامت سوال گذاشتم اگه بقیه بچهها میدونن
بگن لطفا
نظرم رسید گفتم، کلا بیشتر بخونین، از for example, for instance و
.. سعی کنین تو هر بند استفاده کنین
از clause بیشتر استفاده کنین چون باعث میشه رسمیتر
بشه. مطمئن باشین رایتینگ با خوندن و ایده گرفتن پیشرفتش خیلی سریعه
اونجاهایی که علامت سوال گذاشتم اگه بقیه بچهها میدونن
بگن لطفا
If
I have (had) the opportunity to change an
important thing in my hometown, (bad az virgul va
noghte hatman space biad)definitely it will (would) be a substantial change in city transportation
system.(space)Among many necessary needs in this
case,(space..ino dge tekrar nemikonam)I can
mention to the three more(most fekr mikonam behtare(?))important ones: buiding more subway system, (yek
fel bayad biad+ing)more superhighways and the last but not
least,allocating more buses and buss stations in remote areas of the city.(vaghti se ta dalil miarin bayad noe clause ha yeki bashe,
maslan hame avaleshun fel bashe, dar morede jomlatun masalan: chon akhari ro ba
allocating goftin man baghiaro ham be
nazaram bayad fel+ing biarin…)
After waiting for too much(yek kam informal nist? Shayad
Because of the rapid change in the population of our city, now it is the
time to think more about establishing new transportation systems such as subways)
,we must take (make decision) a serious decision about establishing a subway system for
a town with over one million people inhabit in(nemidunam
vali fekr konam it nabayad hazf mishod(?)). (the?)Main
streets of my city,were built around one-hundred year ago and they cannot accept
(bazam motmaen nistam vali fekr konam withstand behtar
bashe)today's population of the city.Transportation
of travelers from one place to another,both in central parts of the city (man nafahmidam manzooretun chie, both be chi barmigarde?),is
too much slow.People in streets specially have a great deal of trouble around
8:00 AM and 6:00 PM,two most overcrowded times.All this,result in deep need of
subway system through (by?) which people including students, office workers and rest
of wide variety of other working persons ( engar
mikhayn begin: baba kheeeeeeeeeeeilia hastan asan! Ye kam informal be nazaram
resid, shayad 'wide variety' ro ghable people biarin behtar bashe: ‘wide variety of people such as students
and office workers’) can go to their schools,universities and works with
less trouble both for themselves and others. (dar
molrede ‘others’ tozihi nadadin, ini ke migam fekr konam kheili mola loghatie vali
dar kol nabayad chizi ke tozihi dar barash nadadin biad, vali vase emtehana
fekr nemikonam irad bashe!)
I have (had) the opportunity to change an
important thing in my hometown, (bad az virgul va
noghte hatman space biad)definitely it will (would) be a substantial change in city transportation
system.(space)Among many necessary needs in this
case,(space..ino dge tekrar nemikonam)I can
mention to the three more(most fekr mikonam behtare(?))important ones: buiding more subway system, (yek
fel bayad biad+ing)more superhighways and the last but not
least,allocating more buses and buss stations in remote areas of the city.(vaghti se ta dalil miarin bayad noe clause ha yeki bashe,
maslan hame avaleshun fel bashe, dar morede jomlatun masalan: chon akhari ro ba
allocating goftin man baghiaro ham be
nazaram bayad fel+ing biarin…)
After waiting for too much(yek kam informal nist? Shayad
Because of the rapid change in the population of our city, now it is the
time to think more about establishing new transportation systems such as subways)
,we must take (make decision) a serious decision about establishing a subway system for
a town with over one million people inhabit in(nemidunam
vali fekr konam it nabayad hazf mishod(?)). (the?)Main
streets of my city,were built around one-hundred year ago and they cannot accept
(bazam motmaen nistam vali fekr konam withstand behtar
bashe)today's population of the city.Transportation
of travelers from one place to another,both in central parts of the city (man nafahmidam manzooretun chie, both be chi barmigarde?),is
too much slow.People in streets specially have a great deal of trouble around
8:00 AM and 6:00 PM,two most overcrowded times.All this,result in deep need of
subway system through (by?) which people including students, office workers and rest
of wide variety of other working persons ( engar
mikhayn begin: baba kheeeeeeeeeeeilia hastan asan! Ye kam informal be nazaram
resid, shayad 'wide variety' ro ghable people biarin behtar bashe: ‘wide variety of people such as students
and office workers’) can go to their schools,universities and works with
less trouble both for themselves and others. (dar
molrede ‘others’ tozihi nadadin, ini ke migam fekr konam kheili mola loghatie vali
dar kol nabayad chizi ke tozihi dar barash nadadin biad, vali vase emtehana
fekr nemikonam irad bashe!)