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اولی:

Letter of Recommendation
To Whom It May Concern
This reference letter is provided at the request of Mr. Amir Mohammadzadeh , who has asked me to serve as a reference on his behalf. I have known him for two years, and As his professor, I have had an opportunity to observe his participation and interaction in the class and to evaluate the student’s knowledge in the subject matter.                                                                                                                                                                       His research ability, professional interest, maturity, motivation, self-reliance and academic preparation are exceptional, incredible and practical. I would rate the student’s overall performance as excellent. Based upon the student’s academic performance, I strongly recommend him for the P.hD program at Finance Department. It is worth mentioning that we have practiced a comprehensive paper about investment . Also he has passed these courses with me successfully with  high grade;                                                                                                                                                                       1) Fundamentals of Investment Management     (17 out of 20 )                                                                         2) Analysis of Financial Statements (18.75 out of 20 )                                                                                          3) Investment management and securities evaluation (16.50 out of 20 )
Sincerely
دومی:
To Whom It May Concern
This letter is in support of Mr Amir Mohammadzadeh applying for  Ph.D studies in Finance department. He has had a fundamental training in Finance Department of University of Tehran. He has all the requirements to make him a very successful Ph.D student. I think he is having a very exceptional capacity for analytical thinking and very good ability to express and organize himself clearly. He has been a top student during his years of study in research and  his performance was exceptional. Since these courses such as;  Financial Seminar, Examining specific cases in Financial Management have been passed excellently by him with  top grades of 20 out of 20 and 18 out of 20 . It is worth  mentioning that an article entitled, The Strategic Investment of Corporate Governance in Improving the Stock Profitability,  has been published by us in Jokull Journal in 2013.
 Based on mentioned reasons, I strongly recommend him to continue his Ph.D studies in your department and wish him a successful career in the future.
Truly yours,

سلام دوست عزیز 
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