28-07-2012, 03:50 PM
(16-07-2012, 06:37 PM)pegah نوشته:a person you know is planning to move to your town or city.What do you think this person would like or dislike about living in your town or city?Why? Use specific reasons and details to develope your essay.
I live in the capital of my country.For some people, especially who live in small towns and remote areas,living in the capital would be a beautiful dream.But from the point of some one's view who is born in such a crowded and modern city,these people are completely wrong.If some of my kins would move to my city,I would try to make them thinking over it more carefully.Of course i percieve that there are many amenities here,but as the time goes on these advantages will fade and disadvantages will get more tangible.There are many problems in my city which will exsaust any pearson after a while.
The most significant disadvantage with living in my city,is exposing to serious diseases caused by air pollution.In my city,many children and adults get lung cancers and heart illnesses annually.And researches have shown the air pollution and chemical fumes are among primary factors causing these sicknesses.Furthermore there are not enough resort areas and amusement parks in the city.Rersidents are forced to drive for hours to get a proper resort place.Thus many people are exposed to spiritual disorders too.
Second,my city's people, just like other big citie's residents,have got too strict and unkind.Some of them even don't know their neiborings indeveduals.Most people only think of indevedual success achieve better posisions or making more money.The affection is forgotten and people usually forget to help or forgive eachother.Indeveduals feel more lonely day by day and depression is outbreaking remarkably.
I should state that there are lots of amenities, many great companies and amazing skyscrapers in my city,which will intrigue any spectator.But there are also many problems in my city that has had diverse nagative effects on the quality of resident's lives .Some serious problems like air pollution and qhysical disorders caused by that.Moreover the city settlers are always in a hurry to attend their jobs, so that even forget their own spritual requisits.warmth and kindness are faded.Therefor i never suggest my friends or my relatives to migrate to my city and settle here.
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