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از این تاپیک جهت قرار دادن نمونه Writing خود از نوع Argument استفاده نمایید.
به منظور افزایش دقت تصحیح نوشته شما،حتما توضیحات و صورت سوال را هم به طور کامل ذکر کنید.
با تشکر
(مدیریت انجمن GMAT)
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ممنون میشم اگه ایرادات رایتینگ من رو هم بگید
از این تاپیک جهت قرار دادن نمونه Writing خود از نوع Argument استفاده نمایید.
به منظور افزایش دقت تصحیح نوشته شما،حتما توضیحات و صورت سوال را هم به طور کامل ذکر کنید.
با تشکر
(مدیریت انجمن GMAT)
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ممنون میشم اگه ایرادات رایتینگ من رو هم بگید
In this argument, comparing two things that there is no relationship
between them has been done and also this comparison has not shown that costs
minimize during years and then profits maximize. Also there is no clear reason
that shows over time organizations learn how to do it better.
between them has been done and also this comparison has not shown that costs
minimize during years and then profits maximize. Also there is no clear reason
that shows over time organizations learn how to do it better.
Most conspicuously, the argument doesn’t show over time, the costs of
processing go down because of organization learn how to do things better and
they become more efficient. In fact, reviewing the example shows after about
14years for color film the cost has changed and it’s more expensive than
before. Because in 1970 the price was 50cents for 5 day service but after that
in 1984 cost was 20cents for one-day service and we can understand that the example
doesn’t support main goal.
processing go down because of organization learn how to do things better and
they become more efficient. In fact, reviewing the example shows after about
14years for color film the cost has changed and it’s more expensive than
before. Because in 1970 the price was 50cents for 5 day service but after that
in 1984 cost was 20cents for one-day service and we can understand that the example
doesn’t support main goal.
Also the other point that can’t be persuasive is reducing price is not
acceptable reason for achieving high quality.
acceptable reason for achieving high quality.
Olympics want to celebrate 25th year, but it doesn’t mean
that quality of food can be the best. Olympics occur every four year and during
this champion some organizations need to prepare food for the population that
attends in this match. Maybe because of number of people they couldn’t to have
perfect service for customers.
that quality of food can be the best. Olympics occur every four year and during
this champion some organizations need to prepare food for the population that
attends in this match. Maybe because of number of people they couldn’t to have
perfect service for customers.
This argument explains some keys that they are not important for quality
of good and it can’t convince readers.
of good and it can’t convince readers.
