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[sepinaz]

اینم دومین متن
یه سوال دارم در مورد این متن تو پاراگراف اول مثلن نمی تونم well رو تو خط بعد بیارم ولی یه پاراگراف جدید رو شروع نکرده باشم؟

Do you think some gestures are universal?
                At first I want to ask you a question. Do you think knowing about universal gestures is important? Well, I think yes. Suppose that you have traveled to a country and you don’t know even one word about the language, when walking on the streets, you touch a person inadvertently. Now what should you do to make them understand, it was not deliberately? Here is where you need universal gestures and body language. So in the next lines, we’re going to get familiar with some of them.
                First of all THE OKAY sign which is used in Australia, USA, United Kingdom and Canada to show satisfaction. To use this sign just join your index finger and thumb together like a ring.
                The second gesture that I can think of is THE HORN FINGERS. Just hold up your baby and index fingers and that will mean approval. This gesture is used in USA, Italy, Brazil, Colombia, Portugal and Spain.
                As the third one, I can name THE FINGERS ALL TOGETHER which is used in Italy, Congo, Turkey and Egypt that means differently in all of these countries. For example, in Congo it means small amount of something while in Turkey it means something is beautiful or well.
                Now come to speak about the most popular gestures through the globe. One of them is THE THUMBS UP. In countries like UK, Australia, USA, Canada and Russia it is a sign of approval but in countries like Iran, Latin America, West Africa, Iraq and Afghanistan it has a really negative impression and should not be used at all. So don’t use this sign if you travel to these countries because they will kick you out of there. Another is the ‘V’ sign. Most of us think that it means victory but if you use it backward, it means peace in the US but in other countries like UK, Australia and New Zealand it is used as a rude sign, showing contempt. THE COME HERE sign as its name suggests is used to motion somebody over in most countries but in Philippines, it is so rude to use this gesture for another person and they use it just for dogs. The last most popular universal gesture that I can think of is THE POINT sign. It is so interesting because in Belgium, The Netherlands, Germany and Australia it is used for number 2 but in China as number 8 and in Italy it is used to indicate that somebody is not good.
                So, if you travel abroad, be careful about gestures that you may use. Because something that may be so pleasant to use in your country may have a really rude and offensive meaning in another country. Cultures are different and so the meanings of universal gestures are.

و یه سوال کلی دوستان
کلا سرعت تایپ چقدر تو رایتینگ ibt تاثیر میذاره؟

 

[sepinaz]

این هم سومین متن

What will education be like in the future?
                Have you ever thought about to what horizons can education reach with the help of technology? If yes, this article is the one you should read in order to have a better imagination about the future of education.
                Following the rapid progress of technology in recent years, we can see that just several years ago, smart phones were not as prevalent as they are now. These devices I think will have a major impact on education, just as up to now, they have played their unique role. With the help of one smart phone and one 3G or 4G fast internet connection you can have access to your school resources anywhere and anytime. So in future more online courses will be offered and that will make it possible for more people to get the advantages of high quality education anywhere across the country.
                In addition, technology will make it possible for schools to concentrate on just one major infrastructure – a fast robust internet connection- so you can imagine a paperless school with no local file storage, everything will be shared online including library resources, homework assignments, etc. Students will bring their own devices – tablets or laptops – to school and using cloud technology they can communicate with their teachers, give the tests and access to the grades instantly.
                With the help of new technology integrated to learning techniques, the role of teacher will also change dramatically. Their role would not be teaching the students but providing great resources such as videos, documents, podcasts, etc and sharing them online. So you see cloud technology will encourage independent learning.
                As has been discussed in this passage, technology will have a great effect on learning process just in few years. Here we mentioned only imminent changes that have already been embraced by some schools in the advanced countries. But using your own imagination and a bit of fiction, you can think of what will education be like in 2050.
 

 

 

[M1KE]

Can manners affect your success in life? How?

I think this question is one of the most important queries that have has been neglected in today’s fast-paced world. Parents are so busy these days to pay attention to the manners that their children need for their entire life and they’re replacing their role with today’s high-tech devices which makes make their children more isolated, preventing them from learning every day manners that will affect their lives dramatically [This sentence was long and unclear]. But what are these manners and can they affect our lives?

First of all, [punctuation] you should be careful about regarding the principles of etiquette. Even in today’s life that the world is turning to a global village and cultures are fusing with each other [the cultural fusion is turning our world into a global village], evolving new ways [new ways of what?] and new expectations, the roots are the same. You should regard [consider] 3 factors in your everyday interaction with others [It's better to write these type of sentences in passive voice, i.e. Three factors should be considered]: respect, consideration and honesty. Observing these 3 keys will make people behave you the same way which will enhance your self-satisfaction, making the world a better place for you to live in.

As the second one, you should learn important manners for every day, amidst them is “Saying No For the Right Reasons”. This one manner will have a major effect on your success. Believe me, if you don’t have the time to meet someone for dinner or simply don’t like the person, you should be able to say “No” politely and discourage the person from insisting on their request.
One of the most important things, you should really pay attention to, is your personal image. Always be careful about your choice of clothes for different occasions, especially in places that you have to deal with people for a long time like school or work. Don’t be extremely showy in such places but try to wear elegantly. Also be careful about your makeup and hair style. Don’t express your individuality a lot, instead try to conform to others in order to make them pay attention to good aspects of your personality. Besides be careful about your first greeting with people every morning. The result of all of these cares is yours.

[For many sentences in the above paragraph you may use the passive voice.]

And at last your table manners will affect a lot on the people’s judgment about you. So always be conscious about them and try to be extremely cognizant about the table manners of the culture you live in. Using good manners in life will have a great influence on you. When people admire you because of your good behavior, they gift you high self-esteem and self-confidence which are the two key factors for a successful and hopeful life.

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NOTES:

* Shorter sentences that are clear and grammatically correct are better than longer sentences with wrong structures.
* Try to use only "one" general idea in every paragraph and support it with examples or other methods of supporting an idea. For instance, in this topic these general ideas could be used:
   - The effect of manners on our career;
   - The effect of manners on our relationships with family and friends;
   - The effect of manners on our mental health, etc.
After presenting each of these general ideas, you may give examples for supporting and clarification.
* The final paragraph should sum up these general ideas.

P.S. Keep up good work.

Can manners affect your success in life? How?
            I think this question is one of the most important queries that have been neglected in today’s fast-paced world. Parents are so busy these days to pay attention to the manners that their children need for their entire life and they’re replacing their role with today’s high-tech devices which makes their children more isolated, preventing them from learning every day manners that will affect their lives dramatically. But what are these manners and can they affect our lives?
            First of all you should be careful about regarding the principles of etiquette. Even in today’s life that the world is turning to a global village and cultures are fusing with each other, evolving new ways and new expectations, the roots are the same. You should regard 3 factors in your everyday interaction with others: respect, consideration and honesty. Observing these 3 keys will make people behave you the same way which will enhance your self-satisfaction, making the world a better place for you to live in.
            As the second one, you should learn important manners for every day, amidst them is “Saying No For the Right Reasons”. This one manner will have a major effect on your success. Believe me, if you don’t have the time to meet someone for dinner or simply don’t like the person, you should be able to say “No” politely and discourage the person from insisting on their request.
            One of the most important things, you should really pay attention to, is your personal image. Always be careful about your choice of clothes for different occasions, especially in places that you have to deal with people for a long time like school or work. Don’t be extremely showy in such places but try to wear elegantly. Also be careful about your makeup and hair style. Don’t express your individuality a lot, instead try to conform to others in order to make them pay attention to good aspects of your personality. Besides be careful about your first greeting with people every morning. The result of all of these cares is yours.
            And at last your table manners will affect a lot on people’s judgment about you. So always be conscious about them and try to be extremely cognizant about the table manners of the culture you live in.
            Using good manners in life will have a great influence on you. When people admire you because of your good behavior, they gift you high self-esteem and self-confidence which are the two key factors for a successful and hopeful life.  
 

 

 

[M1KE]

ساختارهای مختلفی برای نوشتن یک متن وجود داره. برای نمونه در نمایشنامه ها شما به اون صورت پاراگراف خاصی نمی بینید و بیشتر جملات کوتاه هستند که زیر هم نوشته شدند. یا در داستان ها ممکنه برخی جملات برای تاکید به صورت جداگانه آورده بشن. با این حال، در متن هایی که مدنظر تافل و آیلتس هست بهتره این کار انجام نشه و از یک ساختار استاندارد استفاده کنید. یک پاراگراف 4-3 خطی برای مقدمه و بیان نظریه کلی تون در مورد سوال مطرح شده، دو تا سه پاراگراف میانی 5-4 خطی برای بیان نظرات و دفاع کردن از نظریه تون و یک پاراگراف انتهایی برای جمع بندی نظرات ارائه شده.

متن زیر از نظر گرامری خوب نوشته شده و من مشکل خاصی ندیدم. تنها مشکلی که زیاد به چشمم اومد این بود که پاراگراف اول متن ربطی به سوال پرسیده شده نداره و این اصلا خوب نیست. شما بهترین جملات رو هم که بنویسید اگر مرتبط با سوال پرسیده شده نباشه اگر مرتبط نباشه نمره از دست میدین. صورت سوال از شما پرسیده آیا ژست هایی وجود دارند که حالت جهانی و همگانی داشته باشند یا خیر؟ ولی شما ابتدای پاراگراف اول رو با سوالی در مورد "اهمیت" ژست های همگانی شروع کردین! این مثل این هست که از شما سوال بشه آیا در تهران مدرسه خصوصی وجود داره یا خیر و شما اهمیت مدرسه خصوصی رفتن رو توضیح بدین. در این حالت، حتی اگر بهترین توضیحات رو هم بدین به دلیل نامرتبط بودن نمره تون بسته به میزان ارتباط با سوال اصلی، کمتر میشه.

نکته دوم اینکه همونطور که خودتون هم در پاراگراف های میانی و پایانی توضیح دادین هر کدوم از ژست های اشاره شده در کشورهای محدودی دارای مفهوم مشترکی هستند و طبیعتا در بقیه کشورها دارای معانی متفاوتی هستند. از این نظر، به نظرم بهتر بود که نوشته رو اینطور شروع می کردین که اگرچه برخی ویژگی های ژست ها ممکنه در کشورهای مختلف مشترک باشه ولی در حالت کلی نمیشه نمیشه گروهی از اونها رو معرفی کرد که در همه جای دنیا دارای معنی یکسان باشند و بسته به فرهنگ کشورهای مختلف ممکنه برداشت های مختلفی از این حرکت ها بشه. بعد همین مواردی که در پاراگراف های میانی و انتهایی بهشون اشاره کردین رو بگذارین چون دقیقا در راستای توضیج همین موضوع هستند.

نکته کلیدی: عنوان سوال رو چند بار بخونید و مطمئن بشین که در همون راستا هم در نوشته تون توضیح میدین.

پینوشت: در مورد سرعت تایپ، طبیعتا هر چه سرعت بهتری داشته باشند بهتر هم می تونید نظرات تون رو منتقل کنید. خوبی تایپ این هست که می تونید برگردین و در برخی قسمت ها کلماتی رو به جمله اضافه یا حذف کنید بدون اینکه نیازی باشه اونها رو خط خطی کنید. همین طور تعداد واژگان هم توسط نرم افزار شمرده میشه و روی صفحه نمایشگر نشون داده میشه که می تونید ذهنیتی در مورد اینکه به قدر کافی نوشتین یا نه به دست بیارین.
 

اینم دومین متن
یه سوال دارم در مورد این متن تو پاراگراف اول مثلن نمی تونم well رو تو خط بعد بیارم ولی یه پاراگراف جدید رو شروع نکرده باشم؟

Do you think some gestures are universal?
                At first I want to ask you a question. Do you think knowing about universal gestures is important? Well, I think yes. Suppose that you have traveled to a country and you don’t know even one word about the language, when walking on the streets, you touch a person inadvertently. Now what should you do to make them understand, it was not deliberately? Here is where you need universal gestures and body language. So in the next lines, we’re going to get familiar with some of them.
                First of all THE OKAY sign which is used in Australia, USA, United Kingdom and Canada to show satisfaction. To use this sign just join your index finger and thumb together like a ring.
                The second gesture that I can think of is THE HORN FINGERS. Just hold up your baby and index fingers and that will mean approval. This gesture is used in USA, Italy, Brazil, Colombia, Portugal and Spain.
                As the third one, I can name THE FINGERS ALL TOGETHER which is used in Italy, Congo, Turkey and Egypt that means differently in all of these countries. For example, in Congo it means small amount of something while in Turkey it means something is beautiful or well.
                Now come to speak about the most popular gestures through the globe. One of them is THE THUMBS UP. In countries like UK, Australia, USA, Canada and Russia it is a sign of approval but in countries like Iran, Latin America, West Africa, Iraq and Afghanistan it has a really negative impression and should not be used at all. So don’t use this sign if you travel to these countries because they will kick you out of there. Another is the ‘V’ sign. Most of us think that it means victory but if you use it backward, it means peace in the US but in other countries like UK, Australia and New Zealand it is used as a rude sign, showing contempt. THE COME HERE sign as its name suggests is used to motion somebody over in most countries but in Philippines, it is so rude to use this gesture for another person and they use it just for dogs. The last most popular universal gesture that I can think of is THE POINT sign. It is so interesting because in Belgium, The Netherlands, Germany and Australia it is used for number 2 but in China as number 8 and in Italy it is used to indicate that somebody is not good.
                So, if you travel abroad, be careful about gestures that you may use. Because something that may be so pleasant to use in your country may have a really rude and offensive meaning in another country. Cultures are different and so the meanings of universal gestures are.

و یه سوال کلی دوستان
کلا سرعت تایپ چقدر تو رایتینگ ibt تاثیر میذاره؟

 

 

 

[M1KE]

این یکی به نظرم خیلی عالی نوشته شده. اینکه جمله اول پاراگراف اول با یک سوال شروع بشه البته نوآورانه هست ولی رویکرد محافظه کارانه تر به نظرم اینه که از همون ساختار سنتی و کلاسیک مقدمه نویسی استفاده بشه و در جمله اول نظر کلی تون رو در مورد سوال بدین و بعد قدری اون رو باز کنید. حتی می تونید بعد از جمله اول دقیقا همین سوال و ادامه اون رو بگذارید. در نتیجه جمله اول می تونه چیزی در این مایه ها باشه:

پیشرفت روز افزون تکنولوژی و کاربرد رو به گسترش آن در زمینه های مختلف سبب شده تا چشم انداز سیستم آموزشی در آینده کاملا متاثر از آن قرار گیرد.

به عبارتی نظر کلی شما اینه که آینده سیستم آموزشی متاثر از تکنولوژی هست و در ادامه می تونید مثلا به توسعه آموزش از راه دور و کلاس های آنلاین و مواردی از این دست اشاره کنید و بعد در پاراگراف های میانی مثل همین الان ابزارهای مختلفی که در این زمینه استفاده میشن رو توضیح بدین.

این هم سومین متن

What will education be like in the future?
                Have you ever thought about to what horizons can education reach with the help of technology? If yes, this article is the one you should read in order to have a better imagination about the future of education.
                Following the rapid progress of technology in recent years, we can see that just several years ago, smart phones were not as prevalent as they are now. These devices I think will have a major impact on education, just as up to now, they have played their unique role. With the help of one smart phone and one 3G or 4G fast internet connection you can have access to your school resources anywhere and anytime. So in future more online courses will be offered and that will make it possible for more people to get the advantages of high quality education anywhere across the country.
                In addition, technology will make it possible for schools to concentrate on just one major infrastructure – a fast robust internet connection- so you can imagine a paperless school with no local file storage, everything will be shared online including library resources, homework assignments, etc. Students will bring their own devices – tablets or laptops – to school and using cloud technology they can communicate with their teachers, give the tests and access to the grades instantly.
                With the help of new technology integrated to learning techniques, the role of teacher will also change dramatically. Their role would not be teaching the students but providing great resources such as videos, documents, podcasts, etc and sharing them online. So you see cloud technology will encourage independent learning.
                As has been discussed in this passage, technology will have a great effect on learning process just in few years. Here we mentioned only imminent changes that have already been embraced by some schools in the advanced countries. But using your own imagination and a bit of fiction, you can think of what will education be like in 2050.
 

 

 

 

 

[sepinaz]

این چهارمین متن اینجانب
نمیدونم تا چه حد تونستم توصیه های جناب MIKE رو عملی کنم و چه کارهایی باید انجام بدم تا رایتینگم بهتر بشه تو این یه سال که دارم زبان عمومی میحونم و همزمان لغت؟؟
یه نظری هم در مورد طول رایتینگ ها بدید که آیا برای تافل یا آیلتس مناسب هست؟؟؟

What hobbies are the most interesting?
            I think the answer to this question depends on the person’s personality and mentality. Everyone should choose the most interesting hobbies for himself based on these two main factors. Hobbies that really make him to enjoy the life and gift him a better mental or physical health.
            For example think of an introvert person who gets gets more energetical when he is spending time alone for himself. Such person would never reach a real happiness of spending time with friends on the beach, being talkative and playing with others, etc. For such person I think the most interesting hobbies would be listening to music, studying non-professional books, making handicrafts or just waking alone.
            In the opposite side, think of an think of an extrovert person. Such personality gets the energy that needs from his surrounding environment and not from his inside. So for this person, the most interesting hobbies are the ones that deal with people. For example going to concerts and cinemas with a bunch of friends, doing sports like volleyball and football and things like that.
            For me as a person that maybe has a personality between these two endings, most of the time I enjoy listening to music or watching a movie. But I think, I sometimes really need to be with people and go mountain climbing. This kind of sport has 2 benefits for me, it intensifies the mood of trying to reach to a certain goal in me and also makes me graceful of spending a happy time with new people which is excellent for my mental health and on the other hand, it’s a perfect exercise for my muscles and is really good for my physical health.
            So as has been discussed, we can’t think of the most interesting hobbies certainly and everyone based on his own self-image, should choose the most suitable hobby for himself and enjoy spending time for that.
 

 

[sepinaz]

این هم پنجمین و آخرین متن فعلا تا ترم بعد

Is competition good?
Generally speaking, I think not only is competition good but also it is necessary to advance in your career, education, etc. But one important point is that we should be able to discriminate between competition and jealousy which is really harmful for the person’s mental health.
At first, I want to speak about competition and specify its boundaries. Competition means making yourself better in comparison to another one that is better than you in a specific aspect of life. So as you see competition is just trying to reach to the summit earlier than another one. It is somehow good because this way, you try to adjust your paces with another one’s and make yourself faster without slowing down that person. So competition will make you more successful and you will always keep in mind that your current position is not the end and there are higher positions to reach to.
On the other hand we have jealousy. When you are jealous of another person, you will try to make yourself better but meanwhile you will focus on hindering that person from trying more and inadvertently most of your concentration will be the other person not yourself. You take every scheme to reach to the goal of defeating that person but because he is attempting with his own pace without paying attention to anyone else, you get stymied and it makes you nervous, impeding you from trying to reach to your own goals.
So in my opinion competition is good as much as it doesn’t turn to jealousy. It will make you compare yourself with your peers and try to be better than them. So especially for people who have a lot of diligence, competition would be a good way to get familiar with higher summits and try to reach to them.
 

[neo1992]

من تافل آزمایشی امیر بهادر شدم 95 اما رایتینگو شدم 17
سه ماه فرصت دارم وضعیتو بهتر کنم . میشه با تصحیح این رایتنیگ کمک کنید
Integrated Writing 


In these sets of material, the article introduces the concept of team work and expresses a number of advantages for it, for instance, higher progress speed, better development of the project because of wider range of knowledge and skills of team than of each of the individuals, on the other hand, the lecturer states an experience conducted by a company cast doubt on efficiency of team work.
First, the reading article claims that because of higher knowledge and wider range of skill of team than of an individual, the project conducted by team would develop better and more efficient. On the other hand, the lecturer states that a company which conducted a team work project found out that some of the members took advantage of other team member’s hard work and didn't contribute to the project's progress at all. It is evident that these people had a free ride, and this refutes the article's point which claimed that a project would better be conducted by a team than of an individual.
In addition to that, the article articulates that a project would be managed faster and more expeditiously by a team, on the contrary, the lecturer cast doubts on this statement by saying that usually lower development and progress speed is observed when a project is led by a team, because team members have to spend a lot of time to reach an agreement, and obviously although a consensus is essential for a team work, it is time consuming too.
Last but not least, article's allegations about team work being rewarding and team members higher satisfaction about the outcome is proven false by the lecturer, when he expresses that the company comprehended some team members had more influence on the others, and these usually members' ideas are counted as more creative and beneficial and when some of other team members' warnings of abortiveness of such ideas are neglected these member not only are not satisfied by their team's decision but also feel disappointed when the undesirable results of the team's decisions are blamed on all of the team members including them.


آگه هم بتونید راهنماییم کنید که چه کار کنم و تمپلیت های مناسب بهم معرفی کنید ممنون میشم 

[tahy]

Parents' involvement with their children's studies - Past Vs Present
Nowadays education is an important section in all people especially young people's-future grownups- life because, their future job and life style depends on their education. Since parents know this importance and they want a brilliant future for their kids, they are paying more attention to this part of their children's lives.
First, previously parents did not know much about education, and children's future position in the society was not either relevant to their education. I remember once my father told me that when he was going to school his parents could not help him since they were not educated and  but he tried and tried a lot and got  educated  and finally he received a good job opportunity. He also helped his brothers and sisters, so now my father and his siblings have high academic degrees and good jobs. Now all of them know how important it is to be educated and they have encouraged their children to get in to prestigious universities.
Second, A high percent of parents these days are academically educated-this make them experienced- so they know what is good for their children because they have a good knowledge on education and since they are employed they know what is good for their children and what improves their future. In this case they can guide their kids in to right paths, that take them to a bright future. I remember the time that I was going to choose what to study in the university, My dad helped me a lot on that subject, he discussed a lot of things with me which that was very helpful and made me choose Physics as my major and I am really proud of it. While parents in the past did not have these helpful knowledge so they could not help their children as much as nowadays parents.
To summarize, since nowadays parents know more about  education and how valuable education is to their children’s lives then parents in the past, and as most of the parents have high academic degrees these days they have the knowledge and experience to help their children make good decisions.
 
 
 

[neo1992]

ممنون میشم نظرتونو درباره این رایتینگ اینتگریتد بگید 
Online encyclopedias Vs. printed encyclopedias
The reading article states that while online encyclopedias are beneficial they have some very important problems that makes them unreliable, on the contrary the listening article disagrees with the reading passage, and refutes all of the allegations expressed by the reading article one by one.
First, the reading passage articulates that because users who are not academically trained are involved in the process of writing online encyclopedias' articles, these encyclopedias suffer from lack of academic credentials and reliability, however, the listening passage states that neither of the offline nor online encyclopedias are without faults and errors, but the online encyclopedias have one advantage that the offline ones don’t have. The online encyclopedias are viewed by plenty of users every day and therefore they are more likely to get corrected if an error is observed, and in this sense not only they are not less reliable but also actually are with fewer error and faults.
In addition, the reading article claims that online encyclopedias are susceptible to hackers and vandals, and provide them with opportunity to tamper the materials in the cyclopedia and fabricate wrong information, on the contrary, the lecturer believes that online encyclopedias realize the importance of internet security, and use strategies like utilizing read-only article formats and hiring expert and professionally trained special editors to prevent any fabrications.
Last but not least, the reading article states that online encyclopedias are too focused and present the viewers with articles that are partial and biased about what is important and what is not in an article. Once again, the lecturer refutes the point claimed by the reading article by saying that because space is not an issue in online encyclopedias as in offline ones, the information is more diverse and not only this is not a bad feature, but also an advantage that online encyclopedias have over offline ones, and lecturer actually believes that these are printed encyclopedias that are vulnerable to bias viewpoints stated by professional but few editors who write these encyclopedias.