(29-08-2014, 09:27 PM)'هاجر خانی' نوشته:

 

 Dear professor pessarakli

I am hajar khani basiri, I graduated in seed science and technology M.S. of mohaghegh ardabili university. I have decided flow my field on PHD in America or Canada universitys.
Therefore, I did like to guidance me for find a good university, which have this field, and which one is beter? Besides, who have porofessors worked on that? Do you mind give me email of them or introduce me to them?
I would be very grateful for your help.
Yours sincerely
Hajar khani basiri
Esfahan, Iran

Email: hkhanibasiri@gmail.com
یک هفته است رایتینگو شروع کردم
این ایمیلو امروز اراده کردم و نوشتم
حالا ایراداتشو نمیدونم چیه

 

1. نمی دونم چرا برخی از قسمت های متن رو ایتالیک کردین که عبارت خاصی هم نبودن؟
   
2. به نظرم دو جمله ای که آبی کردم بهتره جاشون با هم عوض بشه.
   
3. جمله ای که قرمز کردم معنی اش اینطور میشه که چند تا از استادهام رو راهنمایی کردم! بهتره به جای اون قسمت Under supervision گذاشته بشه.
   
4. در قسمتی که به رنگ سبز در آوردم 3 بار اشاره کردین که کار ایشون علاقه دارین!
   
5. به نظرم در قسمتی که قهوه ای کردم بهتره به جای my واژه the گذاشته بشه چون الان برداشت خیلی عامیانه و غیر حرفه ای از اون میشه.
   

نقل قول:Dear professor X Y,
I am writing to express my desire for being admitted at University of XX for continuing my studies as a master Student in fall 2015. It would be an honor for me if I can follow my studies under your supervision. I graduated in summer 2014 in Landscape Architecture at Binaloud University of Mashhad, Iran .

نقل قول:As research experience, I have conducted undergraduate researches on Persian gardens and determining qualitative and quantitative parameters of assessing urban parks with supervising some of my Professors. The overall aim of our group researches is to determine urban parks weakness and strengths and promote functionality and viability of them for visitors. I would like to continue a path of research on spatial forms of landscape and functionality.
I am especially interested in your previous work on XX it really fascinated me as I am really interested in this subject and one of my university projects followed similar aim and I tried to make my garden alive even at nights when people normally avoid visiting parks.
Reading about your research interests and projects from the web, I found out that the areas of your research fit my interests.
I sincerely appreciate your attention in advance and look forward for your kind response.
Best regards

(01-10-2014, 12:59 AM)'faeze23' نوشته: سلام
دوستان من به استادی درکانادا ایمیل زدم بعدازینکه گفتن فاند ندارن و جواب سوالهام رو دادن این رو گفتن
As to research opportunities to work with a professor in our Department that decision is made by the student in consult with any Faculty member when the student puts forward their Practicum/Thesis proposal. Our Department is very student centred and all Faculty members are open to working with students that are focusing on their particular area of research. Some faculty members have research funds but most like myself work on primarily self-funded research which has little or no opportunity to hire or support students in their research.
۱_منظورشون از قسمت ارایه پایانامه چی هست؟و اینکه بنظرمیرسه این دپارتمان فاند نداشته باشه درسته؟؟
۲_و اینکه من میخام تو زمینه کاریشون باهشون در ارتباط باشم و نظرشون رو بدونم این متن خوبه یا کلا هیچی نگم دیگه فقط خلاصه نوشتم املا رو ندیده بگیرید...
Dear professor xx
Many thx For ur kind response. As a student who is fascinated by ur works i will follow ur works online and i would be grateful if i had the chance to share my work with u and have ur subtle comments on them.

 

(03-10-2014, 09:04 PM)'salyone' نوشته: سلام
از استاد آمریکایی واسم جواب اومده گفته اپلای کن تاریخشم نوشته واسم
تو این مرحله چطوری ازش بپرسم که فاند داره که بده یا اگرم نداره میتونه به تخفیفی تو شهریه بده ؟
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