Can manners affect your success in life? How?
I think this question is one of the most important queries that have has been neglected in today’s fast-paced world. Parents are so busy these days to pay attention to the manners that their children need for their entire life and they’re replacing their role with today’s high-tech devices which makes make their children more isolated, preventing them from learning every day manners that will affect their lives dramatically [This sentence was long and unclear]. But what are these manners and can they affect our lives?
First of all, [punctuation] you should be careful about regarding the principles of etiquette. Even in today’s life that the world is turning to a global village and cultures are fusing with each other [the cultural fusion is turning our world into a global village], evolving new ways [new ways of what?] and new expectations, the roots are the same. You should regard [consider] 3 factors in your everyday interaction with others [It's better to write these type of sentences in passive voice, i.e. Three factors should be considered]: respect, consideration and honesty. Observing these 3 keys will make people behave you the same way which will enhance your self-satisfaction, making the world a better place for you to live in.
As the second one, you should learn important manners for every day, amidst them is “Saying No For the Right Reasons”. This one manner will have a major effect on your success. Believe me, if you don’t have the time to meet someone for dinner or simply don’t like the person, you should be able to say “No” politely and discourage the person from insisting on their request.
One of the most important things, you should really pay attention to, is your personal image. Always be careful about your choice of clothes for different occasions, especially in places that you have to deal with people for a long time like school or work. Don’t be extremely showy in such places but try to wear elegantly. Also be careful about your makeup and hair style. Don’t express your individuality a lot, instead try to conform to others in order to make them pay attention to good aspects of your personality. Besides be careful about your first greeting with people every morning. The result of all of these cares is yours.
[For many sentences in the above paragraph you may use the passive voice.]
And at last your table manners will affect a lot on the people’s judgment about you. So always be conscious about them and try to be extremely cognizant about the table manners of the culture you live in. Using good manners in life will have a great influence on you. When people admire you because of your good behavior, they gift you high self-esteem and self-confidence which are the two key factors for a successful and hopeful life.
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NOTES:
* Shorter sentences that are clear and grammatically correct are better than longer sentences with wrong structures.
* Try to use only "one" general idea in every paragraph and support it with examples or other methods of supporting an idea. For instance, in this topic these general ideas could be used:
- The effect of manners on our career;
- The effect of manners on our relationships with family and friends;
- The effect of manners on our mental health, etc.
After presenting each of these general ideas, you may give examples for supporting and clarification.
* The final paragraph should sum up these general ideas.
P.S. Keep up good work.
I think this question is one of the most important queries that have has been neglected in today’s fast-paced world. Parents are so busy these days to pay attention to the manners that their children need for their entire life and they’re replacing their role with today’s high-tech devices which makes make their children more isolated, preventing them from learning every day manners that will affect their lives dramatically [This sentence was long and unclear]. But what are these manners and can they affect our lives?
First of all, [punctuation] you should be careful about regarding the principles of etiquette. Even in today’s life that the world is turning to a global village and cultures are fusing with each other [the cultural fusion is turning our world into a global village], evolving new ways [new ways of what?] and new expectations, the roots are the same. You should regard [consider] 3 factors in your everyday interaction with others [It's better to write these type of sentences in passive voice, i.e. Three factors should be considered]: respect, consideration and honesty. Observing these 3 keys will make people behave you the same way which will enhance your self-satisfaction, making the world a better place for you to live in.
As the second one, you should learn important manners for every day, amidst them is “Saying No For the Right Reasons”. This one manner will have a major effect on your success. Believe me, if you don’t have the time to meet someone for dinner or simply don’t like the person, you should be able to say “No” politely and discourage the person from insisting on their request.
One of the most important things, you should really pay attention to, is your personal image. Always be careful about your choice of clothes for different occasions, especially in places that you have to deal with people for a long time like school or work. Don’t be extremely showy in such places but try to wear elegantly. Also be careful about your makeup and hair style. Don’t express your individuality a lot, instead try to conform to others in order to make them pay attention to good aspects of your personality. Besides be careful about your first greeting with people every morning. The result of all of these cares is yours.
[For many sentences in the above paragraph you may use the passive voice.]
And at last your table manners will affect a lot on the people’s judgment about you. So always be conscious about them and try to be extremely cognizant about the table manners of the culture you live in. Using good manners in life will have a great influence on you. When people admire you because of your good behavior, they gift you high self-esteem and self-confidence which are the two key factors for a successful and hopeful life.
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NOTES:
* Shorter sentences that are clear and grammatically correct are better than longer sentences with wrong structures.
* Try to use only "one" general idea in every paragraph and support it with examples or other methods of supporting an idea. For instance, in this topic these general ideas could be used:
- The effect of manners on our career;
- The effect of manners on our relationships with family and friends;
- The effect of manners on our mental health, etc.
After presenting each of these general ideas, you may give examples for supporting and clarification.
* The final paragraph should sum up these general ideas.
P.S. Keep up good work.
(10-09-2014, 06:19 PM)'sepinaz' نوشته:Can manners affect your success in life? How?
I think this question is one of the most important queries that have been neglected in today’s fast-paced world. Parents are so busy these days to pay attention to the manners that their children need for their entire life and they’re replacing their role with today’s high-tech devices which makes their children more isolated, preventing them from learning every day manners that will affect their lives dramatically. But what are these manners and can they affect our lives?
First of all you should be careful about regarding the principles of etiquette. Even in today’s life that the world is turning to a global village and cultures are fusing with each other, evolving new ways and new expectations, the roots are the same. You should regard 3 factors in your everyday interaction with others: respect, consideration and honesty. Observing these 3 keys will make people behave you the same way which will enhance your self-satisfaction, making the world a better place for you to live in.
As the second one, you should learn important manners for every day, amidst them is “Saying No For the Right Reasons”. This one manner will have a major effect on your success. Believe me, if you don’t have the time to meet someone for dinner or simply don’t like the person, you should be able to say “No” politely and discourage the person from insisting on their request.
One of the most important things, you should really pay attention to, is your personal image. Always be careful about your choice of clothes for different occasions, especially in places that you have to deal with people for a long time like school or work. Don’t be extremely showy in such places but try to wear elegantly. Also be careful about your makeup and hair style. Don’t express your individuality a lot, instead try to conform to others in order to make them pay attention to good aspects of your personality. Besides be careful about your first greeting with people every morning. The result of all of these cares is yours.
And at last your table manners will affect a lot on people’s judgment about you. So always be conscious about them and try to be extremely cognizant about the table manners of the culture you live in.
Using good manners in life will have a great influence on you. When people admire you because of your good behavior, they gift you high self-esteem and self-confidence which are the two key factors for a successful and hopeful life.
ای دگرگون کننده ی دل ها و چشم ها / ای گرداننده ی روزها و شب ها / ای تغییر دهنده ی روزگار و انسان ها / حال ما را به بهترین حال دگرگون فرما
.We are all visitors to this time, this place. We are just passing through. Our purpose here is to observe, to learn, to grow, to love... and then we return home
Aboriginal Proverb -